Luke definitely has a strong narrative with the Bear-granny. I'd like to see a bit more comedy in the violence, but adding to it may hurt what's already there. Luke definitely has it spot on with the detail and plot. Additionally, I rather approve of the suggestions made in the previous post, though I still have some reservations about the suicide story.
Overall, I think everyone has clear direction for their stories. If I come up with any edits/ideas, you'll be the first to know.
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